Can you help with this blurb?

When testing his brand new telescope on the nearby hills, Ed Frost spots a man walking. Unusually, the stranger stops, leaves something behind and returns the way he came. Ed and his best friend Bertie investigate. They find two terrified Welsh terrier pups tied up in a sack and left for dead. Ed names one Moondust and the other Meteor. Moondust soon becomes a much loved member of the family, while Meteor’s life hangs in the balance.

By chance, Ed spots an advert for puppies in the local newspaper. He phones up pretending to be interested in buying a pup. The pups are being sold at a local farm. Ed and Bertie go on a spying mission. On the way, they meet an old foe and make an unexpected friendship. He has been rejected by his older brother, who is renting the farm and selling the puppies in a heartless money making business. The boys are disgusted by what they see – bedraggled underfed pups, kept in dirty and cramped conditions – a cruel death camp for dogs.

A courageous and daring race for life begins. Can they rescue the pups and bring the sinister operator to justice?

Thoughts and suggestions please …

Thanks peeps

Moondust

This has been a long time in the making.

I wanted to write for children because as a teacher, I love to read to children – to see their eyes light up, to see the sense of anticipation in their faces as the stories unfold and tension builds. They attach themselves like limpets to a character and don’t let go until until justice has prevailed. As a writer I’m a bit ‘rough round the edges’ but I know what kids like and am slowly honing my craft.

Next up, a preview of the story.

Adios peeps

Hello world!

It’s ridiculous o’clock in the morning and I ought to be going to bed … SOON! However, I’m excited that I’ve even managed to set up this blog and looking forward to the roller coaster journey ahead with my new venture … publishing e-stories for children. My first book ‘Moondust’ will be published very soon. However, now is not the time to try and be clever with this blog as I’ve really not much idea what I’m doing and it’s wayyyy too late/early. But in the words of Arnold Schwarzenegger ‘I’ll be back’.

LATERS!